Too Loud
Your percussion, especially your symbols overpower to song way too much. Consider looking into the VST 'BBE Sonic Maximizer', it helps control your volume and is a wuick learn (3 knobs)
Good synth, but there was only one, could have had another square or multi-sine running around a melodie.
Traditionally, the drums in a trance song arent as active as you had them. You were operating like a generic rock song and weren't keeping a tight beat. Once again that crash was just too much, it's really only used for bridges and intros unless you cook up somthing clever.
Good effort, but you needed some pointers. If you want any extra help my contact information is available in my profile.